Peer Review for Gaby Marty

As we all start to get together the rough content for our Project 3, an important part of this is to look at other people's projects and say, "Wow that was really great, I should do that," or say, "Gee that was god-awful, I better make sure I didn't do that in my project." It also always helps to have someone else look at your work and say what they think. Often when we're so close to our work, we either see too much wrong with it, or not enough wrong. 

Adaptation of "Body Paragraph 1" by Gaby Marty

For Gaby's rough cut of her standard college essay, I have decided to do a content suggestion. As this suggests, I will be looking at the content of her excerpt and making sure that it follows the project 3 guidelines as well as making sure that it is detailed and backed up by credible sources.

I think that I helped Gaby with her project because I gave her feedback regarding what I liked and didn't like about the project. I gave her some suggestions about how she could strengthen her credibility in order to make her work and her argument stronger, and I think that will really help her in the long run with her project.

Something that is really important with these projects is making sure that you use all of the genre conventions to your advantage. I feel like when I suggested to Gaby that she try to cite more sources in her paper that it would help to improve her credibility for sure, like we talk about in class when appealing to ethos, but it would also help to strengthen her argument. And having a strong argument is really the most important part of this project.

One thing that I really liked about Gaby's rough cut was that her writing was very strong and very persuasive. It makes me want to look back at my own writing for the script of my video essay and make sure that all the statements that I made were as strong and as compelling as the statements that she made in her paper.